@Aqueous, the expressions are wonderful! her sad expressions make you want to "dawwww!"
Also, it appears that this thread was months ahead of the brony curb. Equestria Daily is barely reporting on those pony personality tests that most of us took around November of last year.
@SquiggleTail - I thought we were behind on those. You mean they are only now announcing them!? Thank you, I must being doing something right if it invokes an emotional response. The sad expressions made me take longer as I was unable to look at them for long, particularly the 2nd and 3rd ones, which is why this was not out say Monday or Tuesday. Still glad you liked them
I'm was not the only one thinking this then
@ZeroX - Chapter 2 search results, there was not much but I left you a question about a writing choice that's completely fine but I thought I'd mention it so you could think about it but for it feel free to ignore me, as it's unimportant.
I think this is more a question, Suddenly, he felt this foreign body mutter out a name: Saevin I see your using italics for him speaking in the past. I think that's neat but maybe you should add " to beginning and end to make it a little easier to see he's speaking. Up to you, I just thought I'd bring it up.
. "Yes Horus?" The equine's host looked up. He saw a handsome young man, with long silver hair and an almost caramel-like tone to his skin. His cat like irises crossed the host's own, only he wasn't looking at this human; he was looking at Horus himself. "You shall awaken in time. I will be waiting... A new character is speaking there so it should be a new paragraph, which also means the following should be a new paragraph because once again the speaker changes, Wait, screamed the pegasus! A purple unicorn's hoof slap brought him back to reality. Depending on what you decided up above, decides if this matters because it is another past thought/speaking part and should match, if you did not alter the above one then this is fine but if you did, then make the same changes to match them.
Spelling She closed herself in, constrantly cried and deemed herself unworthy to continue being the ruler of Equestria. Constrantly I think should be constantly She closed herself in, constantly cried and deemed herself unworthy to continue being the ruler of Equestria.
Here I think you should go to a new paragraph as you change the conversation of the explanation completely as "off screen" you have Horus ask about how they found him, which changes the subject and calls for that new paragraph I mentioned, He asked her when did they find him. She told him that a festival was going on, she came to check on Pinkie after rumors of a murder in the bakery. When she came inside, the place was turned upside down. Everything was destroyed; the chairs broken into pieces, the glass counter shattered to bits, and the curtains and wallpaper shredded into pieces. Judging by how everything seemed "flipped", the unicorn deduced that somepony was looking for something. She then caught eye of a blood trail leading to the basement. Following the path, she saw the unconscious stallion, along with a hoofprint of blood on the freezer door. She then immediately sought help from her friends. "..and then we carried you all the way here. I brewed some medicine and prepare some bandages. Believe it or not, these types of injuries happen really often to ponies like us. Looks like I forgot to introduce myself; I'm Twilight Sparkle. You are?" No answer. Horus sat there, on the bed, void of movement. He was trying to recall the events of his dream, yet to no avail. The only other thing about it is hoofprint is not liked by this site or M. Word but I think your fine as it's a pony word, right?
Now as Buob said this could use some work, -It's no use. -What? -Gosh! I can't remember! These damn Eyes!!! They keep sucking the life out of me! -? -*Sigh I guess I have to keep searching...* Surprised by his sudden burst of anger, Twilight told him to lie down and tell her about his problems. "You're not my therapist." he replied. The unicorn told him to shut up. He sighed, and began telling his story. I'm going to say first don't make the conversation play like that, as in they should all be paragraphs, not things on a list. Also the ? should likely be mentioned as something like Twilight stared at him puzzled. But I think you should be the one to rethink this. If you want I can work something out that may give you an idea or what Buob posted may help you, still, it's up to you, the only thing I suggest for sure is make them paragraphs.
@Buob That's alright, you don't have to do that. I kind of wrote myself into a corner, and didn't know how to continue from there. Writing a ponyfic, I can't wait to see how it turns out.
@Shadow100 That video looks hilarious, hopefully I'll be able to see it tomorrow.
@Aqueous That is epic stuff there, the emotions are really top notch. Fluttershy is such a cutie. Also the cutie mark mischievers. Rainbow Dash not able to get home. I didn't notice that at first but your right.
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@Applejacklove - Thank you, I'm thinking tomorrow or friday I'll send out a spoiler to the next one. Glad you liked it I had forgotten about the cutie mark mischievers from Monday or was it Sunday, finally remembered to share my find. Yeah, I thought it was odd in the episode and I forgot because I was in a rush that day but after seeing somepony else made mention of it, I remembered and brought it up, along with the image.
@Squiggletail: I signed up, I'll attempt to get cozy when I'm free hopefully tommorow. @Aqueous: Nice comic! Kinda makes me wonder what would happen if one waltzes into Equestria as a human.... Probably would be experimented on. Also, you made me want to hug Fluttershy for the unptieth time with the first three panels. Fluttershy is most huggable pony. Also, I too realized Rainbow Dash couldn't make it home, though it took me a while after watching to realize it.
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Wait, quotes should be meaningful? Ugh, fine.
"I'm useless, but not for long. The future is coming on." - Gorillaz
Oh, it's great to see that you joined my cult @Destroyer64... uh, I mean website, yeah, ha ha ha ha! For those of you that are currently involved in the Revolver Project, expect updates on Saturday, including a plot synopsis and character descriptions.
Now, on to ponies! I found it very odd that none of you guys mentioned the new pony happy meal toys that are going to be coming out in America next month (March 5th, I believe) . Hopefully, they're as good as the last set, possibly even better. Also, this may be the very first complete set of McDonald's toys that I'll own. I can't wait!
@Aqueous AMAZING work on Fluttershy! Wow, just wow! Last pic was so cute with the tiny net, hee hee. I could draw Fluttershy, but nopony would recognize her as stick pony.
@KaiserGX Didn't congratulate you on blind bag poniez earlier! Now I know where to hit... Toys R Us fairly close by here. It would help my self esteem to buy something somewhere other than Wal-Mart anyway. I truly detest them, but have to shop there, due to limited Rupees!
@Dark_TeeJay I'll actually probably get 20,000 coins before I can become good enough to get up to that many VR, LOL. And I'm generally an OCD completionist, so I'll have to get all the parts, LOL.
Did somepony mention clop material? Don't let Spike see. After all, he is a baby dragon, and I don't know how he could handle it, hee hee! Actually, if I were Spike, or another pony, I'd probably be hot for Rarity too (notice I said "if" ). I can really relate to Spike because I too have a thing for older, elegant, classy women! Also, there are times when Tabitha makes Rarity's voice pretty sexy! Anypony else notice? Oh, these were the safe-for-work images. I saw some that were much less so (WTF). @Buob This is the only clop material I'll post. Somepony might get the wrong idea out of me, hee hee!
Warning some language but watch Ask That Guy go on about ponies. Also makes great pony comparison, I do not like who he picked for the winner. [youtube:ABLEd_hbTu0] Ask That Guy episode 63 clip
Wich reminds me the Critic really needs to review this show. Or maybe an Old vs New? Or hey, maybe James Rofle could review it? @aqueos lol, Fluttershy with a net is soooo cute.
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@Applejacklove - That's alright. I have the feeling you and your brother will like my fic. I'm not sure about the rest of you. Also, I could write a hybrid from your last RP and mine. Then I'm not totally snubbing you, and you're not in a corner.
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