So I've decided to try my hand at writing an MLP Fanfiction! I've never really written a fanfiction before, I must say.
It's going to be a mashup of MLP:FiM with The Hobbit, because The Hobbit is one of my favorite stories ever and I think I can easily integrate the two series. I'm replacing everything in the Lord of the Rings World with things from MLP, though. Like instead of Hobbiton it'll be Ponyville (the ponies will be analogous to hobbits and others will refer to them as "halflings"), instead of Humans it's Horses, instead of Dwarves it's Donkeys, etc. etc. (and instead of "High Elves" I'll have "High Horses", lol).
I've decided that Fluttershy will make the best Bilbo Baggins counterpart, since she seems like the least likely to want to go on an adventure, much less an adventure to confront a dragon, haha! She's also the only one (other than Pinkie) who lives by herself, so that's another plus. And I'll definitely be using quite a bit of artistic licence, especially when it comes to the geography of the MLP world. I'll be making up a lot of things to fit the story.
And, so, I hope you guys'll be willing to help me out; like giving me ideas and (eventually) giving me feedback on my work. I think I'm gonna have lots of fun with this! So what do you guys think?
And, um, if someone could help me come up with a suitable title, that'd be awesome! As for now... I'm stumped, haha.
@Morpheel: Though not as funny as the term "High Horse"... I suppose "High Elk" will work well.
Oh, and instead of Orcs, I'll have Oxen... but I still need to have something to replace Goblins with... oh wait a second, what about those cave-dog things (I don't remember if there was an actual name for them or not, lol). They'd make awesome Goblin counterparts!
@Morpheel: Yeah, that's kinda how I was thinking. And since Fluttershy's got no pockets... she can hide the ring in one of her wings! I can see it now...
@Gioku Advice for writing fanfics (since I've written fanfics in the past): make sure you balance out every character's flaws and strengths. Don't make a "perfect character", or else everyone's just gonna disregard your story (this is speaking strictly from experience).
Granted, I've gotten better at not only writing, but English in general over these last few years... Still, I'm just saying.
@GuardianKing: For me, at least, so far, I'm having a much easier time writing this than I do writing original stories; with this I already have a plot (the plot of The Hobbit), I already have the characters (characters from MLP:FiM and The Hobbit, the latter of which I only need to tweak to fit in the MLP universe), and all that's up to me is putting it together in a cohesive manner, which for me is the fun part. I don't have to come up with how any of the characters should act or (mostly) what they should do, all that is already given to me, so I can just jump right in.
@Gioku Just giving you a bit of friendly advice (if you scroll far back enough in this thread, you can see my early fanfic attempts and how badly they tanked).
To be fair with myself, I did really set myself up for failure by creating a bunch of OCs on the spot without many references to work with... (but hey, you know, that's how I made Morpheus, soo..... )
@GuardianKing: Haha yeah, no OCs for me! Original Locations, maybe, but everything else already exists.
Thanks for the advice, too - I really appreciate it!
And if you stick around for a bit, I'm gonna post my first few paragraphs for you guys to check out. It's coming along so well - I'm really happy with it so far.
@GuardianKing: Yes definitely! I'd love to see what you've written!
OK, so here's the very beginning of my MLP x The Hobbit mashup-fanfic, for your reading pleasure (and maybe you can help me come up with a title, haha!)
Ponyville was a relatively quiet town, separated from most of the world. Everypony lived in peace and tranquility. The sky was always bright and clear (with the exception of the overhanging Cloudsdale), the grass was always green - it was as peaceful and easygoing of a a town as you could imagine.
In the outskirts of the town, in the surrounding forest, there was a quaint little cottage. A pony by the name of Fluttershy lived in this cottage. She lived an easy life, spent mostly on her own (and with her beloved animals). Though she was a pegasus, she wasn’t particularly good at flying, and thus preferred to spend most of her time on the ground. Though she was very shy and kept mostly to herself, she was well liked by everypony in Ponyville.
One morning, as she was sitting in front of her cottage, watching the animals play, a strange figure approached. He was a grand, grey horse, outfitted in clothes befitting a wizard - for in truth he was one.
Startled by the shadow that suddenly fell over her, Fluttershy looked up. Standing up out of courtesy, she addressed the newcomer in her quiet, slightly faltering voice.
“G-good morning” she said.
The wizard’s eyes, though largely obscured by his prominent, bushy eyebrows, looked rather bemused. A hint of a smile crossed his muzzle.
“What do you mean?” he replied. “Do you wish me a good morning, or mean that it is a good morning whether I want it to or not; or that you feel good this morning; or that it is a morning to be good on?
Flustered, Fluttershy turned her head away, hiding her eyes behind her long, pink mane. After a few moments’ thought, she replied.
“A-all of them at once, I suppose…”
@GiokuThis was a small sample for the story I've written in creative writing class as part of the National Novel Writing Month thing in November. It's not the greatest thing in the world, but I hope you at least somewhat enjoy it.
Everyone else that's part of this thread, feel free to take a look at it too.
@GuardianKing: It's a little too long for me to read the whole thing right now, but it seems really good from what I read so far! I'm really enjoying it! I'll definitely make sure to finish reading it when I've got more time! But yeah, it's definitely very well written! I like what I've read so far.
Also, do you have any thoughts on the start of my story I posted? I'd like to know what you think!
@Gioku See, this might just be me, but I do think your descriptions come off as somewhat flat in a way. That said, you've read bits of my stuff, so you have a pretty good conception that I can spend several paragraphs on describing something small alone, so I probably have some unreal expectations/pre-conceived notions about description. The wording seems a bit simple but completely understandable. Though sometimes, I feel like you do jam some repetition in the reader's face, which isn't necessarily bad, but overusing it certainly does not work in your favor.
I really like the character exchange there. It came off as quite casual and not over-theatrical, while simultaneously capturing the essence of Gandalf and Fluttershy. For a forum post, it's pretty nice.
Though if you really want to see paragraph long posts, you should read my story posts on the NL RPG Thread...
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