Timberwolf licks cupcake icing off of Pinkie, Pinkie giggles.Oh, Chubby, don't you see? You don't want to hurt me, don't you, Timby?Timberwolf wags tail.
@Ultra64: Man, I want to watch that episode again now. I kinda liked the song (though I was craving more actual episode, as musicals usually make me do).
@AlbertoC: Let me guess.... are you vectoring Rarity? My second guess is Twilight, but you drew her already.
I'm pretty okay.
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First off its not complete yet, even as I slept this morning another chapter came up, so maybe this is premature but I'm not going to wait, it is already full of things I do not desire to read and will not be reading it farther. Also some things this guy figured out as he went I'm still going to bring up.
Okay first transition of locations, If I did not know better Fluttershy's house would be in Sweet Apple Acres, Rarity lives beside it and Pony Ville surrounds it or is part of it. Since they just are there, if they need to travel at the start or go somewhere, next paragraph they are there, no hint for the reader, no suggestion they left yet. However the author or writer does later figure out and gives us a clue that we are jumping between times events or locations.
Secondly spell check isn't everything There are no noticeable spelling errors but the writer did not watch carefully so "her" often means "here".
Lastly the story is often confused. This starts out as a clop fiction. Fine, disgusting, whatever but the writer was clearly not focused as the story twists and turns, suggesting cross overs and leading them no where, whatever interests the writer becomes the focus. In other words the writer basically writes two story's and attempts to make them one, which of course ends in failure as I'm not sure what wall was broke but I'm sure it was not the fourth.The plot is seemingly random as plot points come up and are never spoken of again. There are several references made and never expanded, plot points made and dropped. Then there is at least one plot point he changes, from only two being lets say abused to all four, one is even completely forgotten about at one point and I do not know if they'll return. Last thing about the writing would be the characters, Rainbow Dash is out of character at one point and the others follow suit at different points. Not all maybe but most. He hasn't help his story by having all characters unlike able and little reason to explain it. Then turning all the characters into beings with limitless power (His characters) makes for a weak way of editing the story to make Equstria Skyrim, as to apply that game to it and then allows them any power he wishes, which makes for a wreck of a story that should have almost been two different stories.
It's not terrible, its just flawed.
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@SupremeRulerofBlaBla Can't see the video at the moment because of internet usage, but it looks amusing, and random.
Thanks @Aqueous for your review. I'll steer clear of that one for now.
@Tare that one ties with @ZeroX's post for being touching, but if I were to choose one over the other I would have to choose yours, just because of Applejack being there.
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People! You should all read my bad fan fic pick of the week. I'm not just picking horrible stories to torture @Aqueous, I'm doing it so that people can learn from the author's mistakes, and so you can apply some of that knowledge into your writing.
@SquiggleTail - I can't learn much myself from these myself, I already have read alot of terrible writing. I could suggest actually books that show these off well enough but I should not, I would likely offend with my taste in reading and I'd rather not derail a thread. Don't forget TeeJay has read these too SquiggleTail. Well your torture plans go well, but you shall not destroy me with it.
@Applejacklove - Your choice, likely wise. Enough gore and sex in that, more then I'd ever want to read, though I have read much worse.
Oh, worry not, @Aqueous, you sick and twisted fiend! Your final hour is nearly at hand! For I, Captain General SquiggleTail, will see that your death is both swift and painful! For, there may only be one!
Just saw the new episode about the donkey. I wonder why is it that zebras can develop cutie marks but donkeys and mules can't, it's not like they're not members of the equidae family.
@Morpheel, First off, Welcome, I see that you are new here. Secondly, I do find it weird that Ponies and Zebras are the only creatures to get cutie marks, while other anthropomorphic animals (such as Cows and Donkeys) don't have one. Maybe it's just ponies that get their cutie mark, and Zecora's cutie mark is actually just a bunch of squiggles.
Thanks (though this is actually the fourth or third time I post here I think) Yeah, I have considered Zecora's cutie mark being just random lines that conveniently look like a cutie mark, but seeing how this is MLP and they actually made her a toy, I think it's unlikely.
I can understand cows, bisons and sheep's lack of cutie marks, seeing how they're not members of the same family as horses (as far as I know)... But donkeys are, and from what I saw, they're actual residents (cows and sheep are treated as, well, animals). It's not a big deal, but it feels kinda unfair for them to not have "that something that makes them unique".
Also, that donkey was a great character, It makes me wonder what kind of cutie mark he would get.
@Morpheel, Really? I never noticed, sorry. If you do notice, all of the other creatures that can talk aren't really that interesting, or, they are very vague, and we can never truly get to know the character to find out what they would truly be good at. Although, you could see the cutie mark as a way to explain a character without going to much in depth.
Yeah... Though, seeing it from another point of view, cutie marks kind of limit their owners on what they can do and their behavior... So being a cutie mark-less creature is not as bad as it seems (insert a CMC reference here). Maybe donkeys are more "human" than ponies
That animation is really well done, almost looks like the original cartoon!
@Morpheel, Yeah, it's like you're stuck with that job for the rest of your life. Basically, a cutie mark us like your job resume. So, all of the other creatures with sentience in Equestria can pick whatever job that they want. Like a Griffon can do something that isn't related to the sky & weather. Maybe they can bag groceries or something like that.
Let's not forget, though. Cutie Marks are magically inclined and, as you've seen, very base in design. A Cutie Mark may give insight as to what the pony's calling might be, but it's something certain to make that pony happiest. Besides, just because Applejack has apples for a Cutie Mark doesn't mean she HAS to simply buck apples the whole time. All we know is that working on her family's apple orchard makes her happy. She could be an apple botanist or a baker with apples for the long haul. Rarity has gemstones. While she enjoys the beautiful, she's shown proficiency and enjoyment out of gemstone mining. There is always potential for deviation of what they think they know. For all we know, Rainbow Dash could end up a weather pony, Pinkie Pie could end up a professional clown, Twilight could become a star mapper, and Fluttershy could end up the gentle empress of all the world. Cutie Mark's aren't sentences to one specific job for life... just what their calling is and tells them what way they should go. It's simply the first step. ^_^
I actually feel sorry for donkeys and griffons and the like with this in mind... they don't get a magical influence to remind them of what makes them happiest in life. So easy to lose track of oneself...
Yeah, at first I thought that Pinkie's "purpose" was to throw parties. But, after you listen to "Smile, Smile, Smile", you realize that her purpose is to make ponies smile, and throwing parties is a way to make other ponies happy. Rainbow Dash's cutie mark is meant to represent her love of speed, yet, she is a weather pony. Twilight Sparkle's cutie mark is supposed to represent magic, for that is her special talent, due to the fact that unicorns magic is based on heir talent. So, she can be whatever she wants.
@Aqueous Good morning then. Hope you had a nice sleep
@SupremeRulerofBlaBla I know what your trying to do, and I admire it. It's just that I don't feel like reading a story that gets dirty is all. I'm sorry for it to be coming off the wrong way.
Hello again @Morpheel, nice to see you. Btw nice avatar. I love Ghost Trick.
@Shadow100 That looks funny, but I'll have to wait on that for the moment.
@TeeJay Sorry for not mentioning you for a while Spike looks so kooky in your avatar.
Good night everypony My big brother fell asleep all of a sudden.
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