Topic: Critisism on my characters?

Hey, I like all this with the crisp lines and shading! I think the big problem is just that panel with the explosion. It's just kind of hard to tell what's going on. Looks a little sloppy. Also, what's happening with Maus in that last panel? Is his face sideways? I really hope so because I love that idea.

Yeah his face is sideways. I forgot to add the part where Seiz fires his snowball turret. I only had 4 panels to fill lol.

Maus' face got blasted lol.

Dang, you're a pretty good artist. I like the idea of the good characters being sort of chibi and simple and the bad characters being more realistic and detailed. Very neat idea.

Is it better with or without the shading?

Either way here are what 4 of the bad guys look like, and next to Maus for a size comparison.

In order
Joe: A crocodile who lives in Maus' town. He is rude and likes to play hardcore pranks. Does not like visitors. His facial expression is always the same.
Lock-Jaw: A giant prehistoric angler fish, very valuable if caught. Many have tried to capture him, and his scars show this. Many think he is a myth. Maus is not one of them. Lock-Jaw is actually gently when not aggravated. His antenna is mistaken for a pearl when underground.
Vejin: A mystical venus fly trap, grown from a mystical seed, in a mystical lamp. Those who summon Vejin can have three wishes granted. However he will do all he can to corrupt those wishes. When summoned he grows tall into the clouds.
Pandora: A vase of lost and fallen souls. Speaks an unknown language.

lol, i thought that was a haunted carrot in the last panel until i finally read the descriptions. the underlying art is not bad, but with the sketchy style it's hard to see exactly what's going on at first glance. The fonts are also far too small... you want both the art and the words to be completely readable the first time someone looks at it, because there's a good chance they'll only look at it once and then dismiss it entirely if they can't make heads or tails of it on their own.

The images are too large so I hard to re size them in paint for them to fit on here.

Holy crap. Those are epic. Nice work dude.

Wish I could draw that good. Back to stick figures I go.

@Kaiser: you have a lot of unused space, though; there's plenty of room for the words/word bubbles to be proportionally larger. I wouldn't make the font size any smaller than that used in the first panel with the lizard guy if I were you. the proportions in that panel aren't bad... in fact, it's the most readable panel out of the lot with the lack of background and relatively clearer focus on the two characters involved.

Will take not of it! Thanks. Every bit is helping. Should I think of getting Art Academy on DS? I need help with shadows and such. Hows the new avi? I know people are gonna miss me as the 1-up.

Redone! I think...

You're really awesome at drawing. All I can do is stick figure comics...

By the way, are you the person that made the Lockjaw D.I.Y. comic? I really liked that comic.

Yeah I did, lol. I did I think... 3 comics and 2 games with Maus. Lockjaw game where you have to fish him out and a Super Maus where you have to destroy an asteroid.

I used to do stick figure comics back in middle school. It was really fun so then I started using Kirby characters. My comics where only a page in length though. Sometimes if it was epic it was front and back. Lol

I did some concept stuff for Tina's back story. I kind of changed it a bit. She is now an evil kitty who used to be Maus' friend. Maus forgot about her cause he is too simple minded to remember things that happened long ago.

Tina was playing in the field one day when she sat at her favorite place to view the stars. One day she noticed a star twinkle brightly and out of nowhere was struck by two bolts of lightning at the same time. She was believed to have had cardiac arrest and was later found by the Lunaville medic. She recovers in a couple of days and has a personality change and a bit of memory loss from the strike. Somehow she gained information on other planets and languages and believed either aliens or a higher being had cause this event to take place. She became obsessed with it and constructed a power plant/observatory in the hill where she was struck. Eventually building an army of recruitment to help her travel to space called the Twin Bolt, as well as a UFO from blueprints that were impeded in her mind.

Normally it's a comedy and non of the story goes far being one episode. Tina's story was added for some people who prefer a more depth story. These are known as special issues. Still keeping comedy but allowing several issues to come together into a story.

I found one of the original Kirby comics lol from 6th grade!

I'm a little sad people stop commenting and for that I stopped drawing. I want to do more on this, need some encouragement and more critism!

@KaiserGX: perhaps you should get active on an art-based website, like DeviantART or something, where you can interact directly with other artists who are more in the mindset of critiquing things than playing video games. being around other art all the time usually helps to inspire me, maybe it'll help you too.

Pretty cool

Does anyone like the shading? I tried to do a sloppy cute crayon... kid... thing?
http://img211.imageshack.us/img211/456/maus.png

Dang, I wish I were that good, but no...I had to be a botanist

So what do you think of the shading style? I'm not really trying to be lazy but I'm going for a Yoshi's Island/Kirby's Dreamland 3 scribble thing.